Paper 1 Question 2: Richard Branson
The text written is a letter to a “Stranger” which makes the audience quite unspecific and very broad. The letter's purpose is to give the audience advice on how to live a happier life. To achieve this, the letter gives advice to the reader throughout the entirety of it and makes good use of personal anecdotes which summarize where most of the advice the writer Richard Branson is giving comes from. Beyond the personal anecdotes he gives like saying, “I’ve cheated death on many adventures, seen loved ones pass away…” He also gives advice that isn’t exactly derived from him. An example of this is in his writing saying, “Be healthy.” This simplistic advice although not very personal, still would speak volumes, especially in the contextual sense in which it’s presented.
As for the form in which this letter is written. Richard Branson makes use of the common components a letter would have, following suit using an address to the readers saying, “Dear Stranger” and a complimentary close at the end writing, “Happy regards, Richard Branson” making the author of the letter clear. One peculiarity about this format of letter writing is that Richard Branson doesn’t date his letter. This potentially could be purposeful, in that, by not dating the letter, there is no value of time given to this letter. It shouldn’t be looked at as old or new advice necessarily. Otherwise, the writer follows the common format for writing the letter.
In regards to the structure of the letter, the author uses a lot of short paragraphs to organize his text. With a little variance in length, most of these paragraphs just end in different strings of thought, almost like a conversation would. Changing topic by paragraph is a beneficial way to organize this text since advice can sometimes be conflicting and confusing if represented incorrectly. The 12 short paragraphs flow well together and are once again, reminiscent of a conversation. Within these paragraphs were various types of sentences, some with the inclusion of lengthy and complex sentences filled with more explanative advice, whereas others were short and simple advice like, “Stop and breathe.” This simplicity although short in length is still acceptable in inclusion and gets the point across.
There are also many linguistic features spread throughout the letter. For instance, the author’s use of rhetorical questions entices the reader to question themselves by reading it. We read this in the fifth paragraph when Branson writes, “‘What do you want to be when you grow up?’” This, along with the informalities throughout the letter make this more personal despite the unspecificity of the letter addressing. We see this comfortable informal language in writing, “It’s OK to be stressed…” This abbreviation “OK” keeps his advice simple and clear. This is specifically helpful in the context presented where advice can be overwhelming if not kept simple. Along with this, Branson can kill two birds with one stone, by becoming more relatable to the reader. Advice is personal, if not presented in a relatable and personal way, it can be misconceived.
With the tone of the letter being quite uplifting and positive, it is quite simple to pin this on the use of advice. However, looking beyond the context, we can read into certain lexical choices he uses like in writing words like, “appreciate” and “memorable.” These lexical choices promote the optimistic thoughts presented in the writer’s message. Reading even further into the lexical choice, we can see how Branson addresses the reader of the letter in the second person saying, “Be healthy… Be around… Be there… for you.” With repetition of the word “be”, he is indirectly encouraging the reader to take action. He also makes use of the personal pronoun “you” to address the reader directly.
AO1: I your understanding of the letter is very clear 5/5.
ReplyDeleteAO3: Something I really liked in your analysis of form was exploring the reasons as to why the letter was not dated. However, I feel like your analysis of structure was lacking. Yes, you did touch on how big and how many paragraphs there were, but you did not further expand on why he organized his thoughts the way he did in the letter, which was because he wanted to build a sense of trust and friendship with the reader so his advice would be more plausible. 16/20
For the A01 Scale I am going to give you a 4 / 5.
ReplyDeleteYou had a very clear understanding of the text and it was seen very commonly throughout your blog.
You brought up a lot of great points throughout that made up the letter.
For the A03 Scale I am going to give you a 18/20.
Your structure was very planned and consistent throughout the blog. You make each paragraph about a certain topic which makes it very easy to read.
You talked about form, language, language and more. You give good examples of each of these so well done.
You talked about why the author included things which were great.
You use good quotes and back them with good explanations.
Great job.
AO1: 4 Marks - First off, I’m blown away with how you worded your sentences and used words I haven seen in anyone else’s. You were able to get a wow from me because of your writing. Your writing really told me you knew the assignment and you were confident with what you about about english and all the elements in this paper
ReplyDeleteAO3: 15 Marks - As I began to read, it felt really weird jumping into it. There wasn’t much of an intro and it made it sound unfinished and you were only writing down ideas without organizing them. Besides that, as said previously, the info you gave, phenomenal. However, one thing I would like to see is more paragraphs. They are an ok size but it would have been better if you broke them into more so it would be easier to follow along and jump from idea to the next. Good splitting points are when bringing in a new idea with an old one or on ‘however’. But that’s really it for this.
Overall Marks: 19 Marks, Fantastic Job!
I really liked how you started your blog. You stated the audience and purpose and also who the speaker is in the first paragraph which is very good and will help earn points. Something I noticed was that you referenced ethos without stating ethos in the first paragraph when you stated “makes good use of personal anecdotes” If you were to state that this shows pathos you could have gotten some marks. As for the rest of your response I think that you did a fantastic job analyzing the form structure and language used in the letter and I also thought that you had very well put together and concise paragraphs that made sense. For AO1 I would give you a 3 and for AO3 I would give you 13 marks.
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ReplyDeleteOn the AO1 scale, I would award you 3 marks. I found your overall understanding of the text to be clear. I also found references to charistic features to be clear. I thought your concepts would have been explained much more thoroughly and less repetitive. For example, you repeated the word “letter” 8 times in the second paragraph alone.
For this reason again, I am also awarding you 8 marks. This is because, I think you could have referenced more concepts regarding form, structure, and language. I also think you had room for improvement on linking all of your points back to the main “why.” For example, its always easy to relate back to purpose and audience.
This leaves you with a total of 11 marks for this question.